Little Lotte Anonymous
01/06/07 - 09:11 pm
A World With No More Night
First two chapters are AWESOME just be sure not to repeat yourself continuously. Though I do know that there are very few words that mean the same as father, in the first couple paragraphs you used father quite repetitiously. Still very good, can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! If you want to read the whole thing, you can find it on Fan Fiction. Yeah, thanks for pointing that out by the way. I'll try to avoid that in future! Thanks again and rock on!
Love & Peace,